Looking for some feedback - short erotic stories.

[asdatasd]

Hey All, as I wrote in the topic, I am looking for your candid feedback on how to make these better, don't be afraid to give your honest feedback.
I will be posting in parts, mostly as it takes time to imagine and write it all, it is all written from my perspective (I am a guy) - feedback from ladies is highly appreciated.

Anyone trying to commercially profit from this will be hunted down, if you copy any give some credit and contact me.

[asdatasd]

While we are sitting on the sofa watching some tv, I start playing with your hair, starting from the roots I pass my fingers through it all the way down.. in between I will give a little pull to it... I can see you are starting to like it as at one of the pulls you close your eyes and arch your head back, during this moment I sneak a lick to your neck, you taste so good and you smell intoxicating.
Goosebumps come over you and your lips open a bit in a sign of pleasure, I go in and kiss your neck, slow long kisses starting at your collar bone making my way up to your earlobe, my right hand slowly going through your hair and the left one is squeezing your hand, you squeeze back
When I get to your earlobe, I give it a little bite, move your hair a little backwards and with the tip of my tongue I trace the back of your ear, you let out a sigh and turn to kiss me. I move my lips back, you open your eyes trying to see where I am but the you see that I have a smile on my face and my head is shaking "no" slowly from side to side.

I pull your hair softly back so you reveal to me your neck, I start making sure that I don't ignore the left side of it and slowly kiss your ear, my tongue goes in, you love it, your hands squeeze my shoulders slowly making my way to your collar bone, kissing around your V shaped cleavage.

My left hand slowly made it's way to your things, gently going up and down, I can hear your breath getting heavier.

I lean in for a kiss and when my tongue enters your mouth I tighten my grip on your thigh and push your head a little forward, you squirm a little in pleasure.

You are hot to the touch, your lips are so soft and supple I cant stop myself from biting your lower lip playfully, you lean back again and tell me “more”, my hand goes up your thigh and with a feathery touch two fingers lightly go over your underwear, I can feel it is steaming and wet, my hands move back to your right thigh and spread it with force, you love that, However my hand instead moves to your left thigh and while I apply pressure it moves down to your calf, grabbing it lightly and moves back up applying pressure, our tongues fight lightly, you try to insert your tongue into my mouth, I let you and suck on your tongue while holding your neck from behind, this is a new sensation for you, I move my right hand over your cheek and squeeze a little while moving my mouth away, I want you to look at me. you open your eyes, my hand is still on your cheek, gently moving down, holding you... My left hand presses suddenly against your vagina, with the thumb pressing on your cliterous, I can feel you tremble lightly, and the look in your eyes makes me want to take you right there. My thumb slowly massages your cliterous in circles, while you’re looking at each other’s eyes, both of our breathing is heavy now, I pull your shirt down a bit and move the bra away to reveal an erect nipple that hasn’t been attended to, while my thumb is still going in circles, my tongue is flicking your nipple up and down, up and down... Moving in to swollow it whole in my mouth and suck on it and while moving my head back, my teeth lock in on it, and the tongue just needs another last spin, I stop moving my thumb, you have a look as if something is wrong, I have a smile on my face.

I get up and stand in front of you. Go down on both my knees and move my head between your legs, you’re looking down and biting your own lower lip in anticipation of what is going to happen, you have your left hand on my head and with the right you are grabbing your own breast, moving it up and down.

You smell amazing.

My nose moves up and down your vagina, my beard bristles are rubbing against your thigh like dozens of soft needles, soft to the touch,I give you a single long lick through the underwear, you grab your own breast harder trying to push my head in... I back away. My tongue slowly goes over your inner thigh, My tongue slowly goes over your inner thigh, I take a sniff of you, it is a sweet and intoxicating smell of your juices.

My tongue goes for another lick, but this time, I pull your lingerie a little up till your outer lips are showing and with a slow long lick I start with the left lip, my eyes looking at your face, you have your eyes closed and the head is arched back... I can't have enough of how you look.
While I move to your right lip, my hand moves to your breast, grabbing it and squeezing it hard while my tongue moves up the right lip, your head moves in a circle and hot air comes out of your breath, your hand squeezes and pulls my hair which makes me press my tongue and your breast harder while I am still licking up. Your juices are oozing, I can taste it, it is so sweet and makes me light-headed.

I quickly go up, making sure I grab both your wrists with my hands pulling them above your head, for a second my hands let go of your wrists, however you are so turned on about my crotch pressed against you that you keep the position of your hands.

Suddenly, you hear a few clicks and you feel something cold closing around your wrists. You quickly realize those are handcuffs and you jolt in surprise, only to have a few seconds later a grin come over your face and your tongue licks your upper lip, while having a sultry look on your face, I put my mouth close to your right ear and whisper "This is what you have been waiting for".

I pull down, with a swift motion I grab your lingerie, pulling it quickly off.

In front of me I see your beautiful pussy, wet and inviting. You were not expecting that and shy away a little bit, trying to close your legs, I stop you with both my hands.
I move my body back a bit, taking in the helpless you right in front of me. Cuffed, naked, wet, breathing heavily... It is a delightful scene, taking my middle finger and pass it over your pussy, making sure your liquids are over it. I put it in my mouth and suck your juices off with delight.

I go at it again, slowly moving my middle finger over your pussy again, this time slowly pushing it inside for more of your juices to pour over it, I offer you a taste, you suck on my finger before I even finish the sentence, you bit down on my finger a bit, not letting go.

Can't wait anymore, I move closer to you, moving my face down and with as much pressure as I can I press my tongue over your vagina, and with a big long lick I move my face up. You squirm in pleasure while in cuffs, my hands are grapling your thighs, keeping my candy at licking distance. I keep going with long, hard licks over and over again, every time you squirm to a different direction.

Suddenly I stop for a few seconds, and before you realize, I stick my tongue inside of you, trying to go as deep as I can, wriggling it inside of you. you start moaning harder, as soon as I hear it I put my palm over your mouth - we don't want to wake the neighbors, my tongue keeps going back and forth into you while I grab your left thigh, my right hand alternates between squeezing your breasts and grabbing your hip to move you closer, so you can feel my tongue going deeper into you.

Part II will come later.

[madpig88]

Thanks for sharing this nice story TS, please continue.

[MPLover]

really like your story ts! hoping for more juicy updates.

[whitetreefrog]

Camping for next update .

[mousaleh]

Will there be any more updates soon ?

[FreakyPartner]

Pitching tent …

[AdamWest]

Camping for Part II

[sponge05]

Interesting story TS, will be great if you will continue with it.

[ViVianCunt]

Originally Posted by mousaleh

Will there be any more updates soon ?

Most likely there will be .

[asdatasd]

Everything will come in due time
All I write below is partly imagination, partly my own experiences - you can decide for yourself which one is which.

Do note, that this is a fantasy, if you're going to re-enact this in your bedroom, make sure to define and understand each others limits, don't do this on someone unsuspecting.

Thinking about this one, I will probably break it down to 4 or 5 parts, see how it goes

[asdatasd]

Part II


A big stain has appeared beneath you and it is getting more moist and larger by the second, party because of your juices, partly because of my saliva over you, my left hand is still over your mouth, I can feel the warmth of your heavy breath on it and muffled mumbling, I take my hand off so you can say those words I've been wanting to hear, you don't disappoint.

"Fuck me" you say assertively while gazing straight into my eyes, I return the look with a smile, you know that look... you know that it will not happen so easily; My left hand goes down to your clit to keep messaging it and while I'm at it, I respond to your insolence in my own assertive tone but not in a loud voice, nor a whisper. "You don't deserve it yet." That moment your eyes shutter a little as you realize you like this treatment.

Your entire life men just wanted you for sex, and at some times you obliged because you were lonely; but at this moment, sex is not the main course but rather what is leading to it.
You decide to close your eyes and let your control go, you've never felt like this before: it is exhilarating but at the same time you just let go.

Everything stops, it takes you a few seconds to notice that I am gone and you can't see me. You try to move forward but realize you are still cuffed to the grill, the sofa cushion is soaked and you feel how it is slowly cooling down.
Bewilderness comes over you while you're trying to puzzle what is happening, you are speechless and can't make a sound. You hear a door close from upstairs, you hear the faint sound of a chain - you don't know what to expect and hesitation is starting to show.

I appear through the corridor wearing a pair of loose pants, in my hand I'm holding something that you can't quite make of yet. With a big stride and a serious face I come towards you, you finally can make what is in my hands - those are cuffs and a chain linking them. You look at me and ask "What are those for?", without replying or acknowledging you I kneel and start cuffing your ankles, first the left and then the right; the leather feels soft on your skin.
You try to voice your concern again, I lean towards your face staring directly at you, placing my right palm gently on your cheek, it's warm and bring back that sense of trust you have for me - trust that you know I won't break and won't let anything bad happen to you. "From now on, there's no talking. Do you understand?", "Yes" you say with a gentle voice.
"Yes what?" I tell you in a stern voice.
"Yes sir..."

I rise up and undo the cuffs on the grill, your wrists show a slight redness from all the squirming, you move your hands away to check the ankle cuffs you're in but immediately stop when you feel my stare on you, you look back up and see my intense stare. "I did not tell you to get out of position yet, besides we're still not done with the cuffs.", you sit there thinking what is going to happen tonight... I dim the lights, it's not pitch dark but feels more like a candle lit room.

"Go to the middle of the living room and kneel, put your hands behind your back, and keep your gaze straight", you comply and start moving, you find it harder than usual to walk as the ankle cuffs are restricting your movement. You kneel down and place your hands behind your back, you form a V shape with your palms, your gaze is forward towards the entrance door, the curtain is cover the glass door but every gust of wind flails it and giving a glimpse of the outside world.

You kneel there, you have no idea how much time has passed, you can only see me in the corner of your eye, if feels like it has already been forever, you feel a little humiliated, but with that humiliation there is also another feeling which you can't quite tell what that is. Suddenly there's movement in that corner of your eye, I'm no longer on the sofa... You feel my presence next to you, but as I am barefoot, you can't make it out where I am; this excites you and your breath once again is starting to hasten just as it did before.

[shawnwhite]

Thank you for the update.

[found09]

Nice story TS

[PorkEater]

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